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    dots Submission Name: Between The Rock and The Skydots

    Author: Mithrandir
    ASL Info:    28/m/N.Y.
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 452/681/113
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I had lost my voice for a long time, and i went astray.

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    dotsBetween The Rock and The Skydots

    Traveling between heaven and earth
    Where there is only horizon
    Caught between
    What is and
    What might be

    The mind wanders
    Always revisiting
    A face it's studied
    So very well

    This moment
    Of weightlessness
    Is fraught with danger
    For it is not yet time to ascend
    And landings can end with a crash

    The heart races
    Fearing it
    Is unequal
    To the task ahead

    Between the Rock
    and the Sky we travel
    Between the Rock
    and the sky
    We are lost

    The hands tremble
    Longing for an
    They have never known

    When at last
    The veil
    Is pulled back
    Will it have been worth the trip

    Between the rock and the sky
    We travel
    Between the rock
    And the sky
    We are lost

    The time for
    Counting stars
    Has passed
    These feet need
    To touch the ground

    Though the heart
    May race
    the hands
    They still tremble
    And the mind
    wanders on

    Between the rock and
    The sky we traveled
    Between the rock and
    The sky
    We found peace

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    ||| Comments |||
      I think we all spend some time here. It's that place where we feel we are just marking time, waiting for we know not what. I think everyone has been there, we just describe it differently. For a moment I was in a metaphorical airplane trying either to land or take off.
    Overall I like the form of this. The punctuation is not needed because you used the line breaks to control the pauses. The word choice and imagery is good, so I have no really constructive criticism for you. Glad you voice is back. Mine is slowly warming up, and I am going to try some different forms in the coming weeks.
    | Posted on 2015-03-13 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]

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