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A vision of G-d as Wife

Author: Ontlogicalamity
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A vision of G-d as Wife

We met, our passion flared, and curiosity.
We promised things to each other,
And when the passion faded, and curiosity sated, to promises we held.
Years go by and life happens.
We share sadnesses, and our promises endure.
Then we share joy.
The joy fills us and rejuvenates us, but also fills our lives.
But we make time for each other when we can, because we know the value of our promises.

Where would we be now, had we not kept them?

G-d is spread thin,
and G-d's work goes unappreciated by Her husband,
who shirks his promises,
plays them down,
or forgets them completely.
She can only do so much, and the less he loves Her, the less She can do, the less She can endure.
Her husband feels the distance growing between them, and is torn.
He misses Her, but She is not the G-d he once knew, so fiery, passionate, and active!
Instead She seems absent most of the time, paying little attention to him.
And what began as a void becomes a chasm, and then that chasm begins to fill. With resentment, distaste, anger and jealousy... then the chasm widens into a canyon so vast that nothing can fill it , and thus apathy, and separateness.

Would you want this for your marriage?
Why then for your faith?

Submitted on 2015-03-13 00:16:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I think this idea is accurate. The comparison to faith is very much like marriage. I notice that the husbands reactions, though accurate could be avoided. As a person of faith and as someone who searches for a relationship of marriage with the holy Trinity, though I find this hauntingly accurate, I also question the truth of fate here. Of course this can happen. Your causes and actions are almost certain in any relationship even with a higher power. But as I feel with any relationship, there is a foundation of pursuit, trust, and romance that both parties have to maintain. God cannot whoo his lover without that lover being present minded. Vice versa, should we run to god, speak to god, love god, and receive no confirmation at any point he is there, that he reciprocates, all would be in vain and there would be no love.

While I love your presentation for this I tend to feel as with any relationship the fate of faith and marriage depends on thoseninvolved. We all make choices that speak to our character, that have consequences either positive or negative. As we feed one or the other so reality would reveal our actions. If we nurture our relationship even in times of turmoil or in the seemingly absent moments of faith, I believe that the fire and passion of the initial coitus between the two is not only alive but growing and infectious to all who witness the union.

Very awesome coming across this I was delighted with the premise. Thank you most sincerely for sharing.
| Posted on 2016-12-15 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
  Very interesting.

As purely a technical point, the tenses jump around in the first section. I understand that time has moved forward after the first three lines, however you might consider either separating these from the next lines by an extra space, or changing the tense to be either all past or all present.

With that little nitpick out of the way, you make an excellent point regarding faith. Faith is interesting in that it is sort of a background operation, like the programs that run on your computer quietly while you game, surf, and work. You tend to do the necessary maintenance, such as ridding it of viruses, performing updates, and the like, and meanwhile, the more internal aspects are being ignored. Basically you have to suffer a spiritual blue screen of death, if you will, before electing to do something about it.

Faith is so intertwined with other things we almost hardly notice it is there. It is an integral part of our worldview, but sometimes life erodes it. The big question is how to stay on top of this. How do you keep that faith oiled and running when life is busting down your door, sapping your strength, stealing your health, taking things that you love and rearranging them unrecognizably? I guess you have to stay above it somehow, to learn how to separate faith from circumstance. Ultimately you should not look to circumstances to dictate your faith... yet this is one of life's most difficult and important lessons.

I loved your comparisons to marriage. These were concise and accurate, and really hit home.

Thanks for the read!

| Posted on 2016-09-07 00:00:00 | by BlankSheet | [ Reply to This ]

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