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Author: Blue Monk
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Let there always remain mystery. This is, after all, poetry. Our fellow Monad inspired me thus with his "Unity" which fittingly fits such a moniker. Muse each other... do.


Fallow 'twixt all timelessness soul mates do never fail
to bask as one under a sun beyond the fountain veil
each ken to fire's creation and bride of the cosmic sea
each death in mirth they are to suffer only by degree

Fair spirits pass in mist and dew each spirit soars anew
beyond the peaks where eagles fly where lion rests with ewe
'tis love survives eternity that we cannot conceal
but knowing this we cannot say and never shall reveal

Submitted on 2015-03-13 08:52:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Perhaps your correct Lloyd, without the hand of God's intervention we may never reveal. Let's aspire anyway!!!


PS: I've come to appreciate the maieutic of your inside joke. Socrates would be proud of you.
| Posted on 2015-03-13 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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