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    dots Submission Name: Polka Dots Are Made For Livingdots
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    Author: Kael Fenshir
    ASL Info:    26 / M / That weird place
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 17/57/52
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsPolka Dots Are Made For Livingdots
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    I kept on reading that wonderful sign
    the one that urges me on when times are bad
    but things aren't as awful as you made them out to be
    no matter the wonderful time we had

    Thinking, cussing, shaking
    these are the ideas stuck to my brain
    the ones that made you strong
    just way too strong

    And so the beautiful moon reaches its apocalyptic state
    impregnating the womb-like sky
    tree trunks have sunken deeper now
    along with that polka dotted skirt

    Every evening I share this monologue
    with my oh so loving dog




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      I think I have found a new favorite in your writing. The personification is fresh and accurately placed in this piece. Again this took on familiar tones I can personally related to. Every line was so original but the entire piece was still cognizant.

    Thank you for sharing.
    | Posted on 2015-07-03 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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