Polka Dots Are Made For Living by Kael Fenshir

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Submission Name: Polka Dots Are Made For Living dots

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Author:	Kael Fenshir
ASL Info:	26 / M / That weird place
Elite Ratio:	2.18 - 17/57/52
Words:	98

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
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Polka Dots Are Made For Living dots

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I kept on reading that wonderful sign
the one that urges me on when times are bad
but things aren't as awful as you made them out to be
no matter the wonderful time we had

Thinking, cussing, shaking
these are the ideas stuck to my brain
the ones that made you strong
just way too strong

And so the beautiful moon reaches its apocalyptic state
impregnating the womb-like sky
tree trunks have sunken deeper now
along with that polka dotted skirt

Every evening I share this monologue
with my oh so loving dog

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I think I have found a new favorite in your writing. The personification is fresh and accurately placed in this piece. Again this took on familiar tones I can personally related to. Every line was so original but the entire piece was still cognizant.

Thank you for sharing.
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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.