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Threaded Revelation

Author: ShadowParadox
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Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Threaded Revelation

I requested peace

But instead became fabric
Bought from a store of madness
Those leathery hands touched the silk of my inner

Feeling the quality of my chaos.

I lay


I am bought

Spread across a table

The scissors

Those scissors

Cut through me

Measuring me like haunted opinions.

I'm stuck with pins

Slicked with sweat from my creators fingers


Why are you doing this to me?

I want to cry

But I am nothing but fabric

Sewed into what others want me to be

To do

To see

I am all sewed up and priced up

I am bought again

Although I am something different

My new owner puts me on

Oohing and ahhing

I've heard the phrase

“Wear the clothes and don’t let the clothes wear you.”

I'm going to wear this human today

The fabric becomes skin

Because my ambition is stronger now

The details and lines are my veins

Those flowery designs....

That’s part of my heart

I am human art formed by earth

I refuse to be on anybody’s cutting table

Instead I am a canvas

My skin

My mind

My heart

My soul

…Is the very ink of creativity

The very fabric of who I am

No scissors and needle will affect me

I am liquid

The threaded revelation that manipulates form

I am a new world within

A fabric of understanding, learning and loving

I will not let those designs of my life fade

Like ancient cloth

I will constantly be refreshed

Like seasonal rain on grass and flowers

I will forever grow and shine

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  L4 the adjective "inner" needs a noun, you could call this discrepancy style but consider making it 'inner self or inner soul. L35 "that's part of my heart"…should be 'that are part of my heart', the reason being "that's" means 'that is' this is singular, "those flowery designs" which precedes it is plural, it should be 'that are'.
| Posted on 2015-04-15 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
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| Posted on 2015-03-19 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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