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    dots Submission Name: Threaded Revelationdots
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    Author: ShadowParadox
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 23/66/34
    Words: 401
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    I requested peace


    But instead became fabric
    Bought from a store of madness
    Those leathery hands touched the silk of my inner

    Feeling the quality of my chaos.



    I lay

    Waiting



    I am bought

    Spread across a table

    The scissors

    Those scissors

    Cut through me

    Measuring me like haunted opinions.



    I'm stuck with pins

    Slicked with sweat from my creators fingers



    Why?



    Why are you doing this to me?

    I want to cry

    But I am nothing but fabric

    Sewed into what others want me to be



    To do



    To see



    I am all sewed up and priced up

    I am bought again

    Although I am something different

    My new owner puts me on

    Oohing and ahhing

    I've heard the phrase



    “Wear the clothes and don’t let the clothes wear you.”



    I'm going to wear this human today



    The fabric becomes skin

    Because my ambition is stronger now

    The details and lines are my veins

    Those flowery designs....

    That’s part of my heart

    I am human art formed by earth

    I refuse to be on anybody’s cutting table

    Instead I am a canvas



    My skin

    My mind

    My heart

    My soul



    …Is the very ink of creativity

    The very fabric of who I am

    No scissors and needle will affect me



    I am liquid



    The threaded revelation that manipulates form

    I am a new world within

    A fabric of understanding, learning and loving



    I will not let those designs of my life fade

    Like ancient cloth

    I will constantly be refreshed

    Like seasonal rain on grass and flowers



    I will forever grow and shine




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    ||| Comments |||
      L4 the adjective "inner" needs a noun, you could call this discrepancy style but consider making it 'inner self or inner soul. L35 "that's part of my heart"…should be 'that are part of my heart', the reason being "that's" means 'that is' this is singular, "those flowery designs" which precedes it is plural, it should be 'that are'.
    | Posted on 2015-04-15 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      Strained as it might seem this brings to mind my martial arts avatar "carousel ceaselessly ceremony chaos character charisma", and "amalgamated anathema android". Though I'm pretty sure I wouldn't want to wear the people which this proxy (garment) was fallaciously sold to, I'm damn sure I'd want to impress upon them the execrating eventuation evocative this expletives caused me. Give them the old citizen's arrest for accepting stolen merchandise. Yet in human terms we all get passed around to a degree, I like to think this social contiguity could impetus intrigue be a good thing but I feel you. Often it's sort of a misanthropic vicarious recalcitrance rather than the intuitional intrepid it integrity ought to be. Even still I try to remain (aimed their environment) philanthropically phenological with the ingrates!!
    | Posted on 2015-03-19 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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