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    dots Submission Name: Lost Sea Turtledots
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    Author: TeslaKoyal
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 19/66/84
    Words: 254
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsLost Sea Turtledots
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    Along the beach on the wet sand
    A sea turtle had washed ashore
    But it was not an accident
    The sea was not home anymore
    She could not stand the water's depth
    The salt was just too much
    Waiting for the nasty old sharks
    They'd give her shell a crunch
    A crab walked over to the shell
    Of the turtle who was all alone
    He asked what she was doing
    And she said that she didn't know
    The crab offered her some help
    She paused then accepted his offer
    But then he pinched her and ran off
    To help, he didn't even bother
    The sea turtle crawled far away
    She reached a patch of grass
    Something caught around her neck
    It was some sort of trash
    A garbage can was on her left
    And a busy road on her right
    A flock of hungry seagulls dove
    They wanted to start a fight
    But she was not the food for birds
    Though she did smell of the sea
    She knew she wasn't a fish
    And asked "Why would they pick on me?"
    The sea turtle continued her journey
    Her destination was unknown
    The more she was bombarded
    The more her shell had overgrown
    Nobody seemed to notice
    A sea turtle wandering around
    They just walked all over her
    Until her dirty shell was found
    A random man had picked her up
    Went to his car and turned the key
    Arrived at the very same beach and then
    Threw her right back in the sea




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      ...and I ponder what had gone through this random man's head
    as he threw a turtle's shell back into the sea
    at all.

    How would you feel
    if during a self-resuscitation
    somebody take hold of your physical body
    and suppress what you'd been relieving?

    Pompous fool.
    | Posted on 2015-04-14 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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