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Colorscape


Author: ShadowParadox
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Words: 16
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Colorscape



Jet black were his words
Dripping from his mouth

Poison

Discoloring my hearts canvas




Submitted on 2015-03-24 16:18:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  no mistakes
| Posted on 2015-04-15 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
  Wouldn't this boy's words paint it black, rather?
| Posted on 2015-04-14 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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