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    dots Submission Name: Slithering of Snakedots
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    Author: ShadowParadox
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 23/66/34
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsSlithering of Snakedots
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    She shed her scales by each drop of rain
    her eyes; poison in blood
    the desert her veins
    as she travels across silk concrete
    towards the edge of her mind
    the bloom of yesterday billowing its monster
    side glances perceive venom

    Israel is tangled in her hair
    she is drowning in harlots blood
    frozen against an eclipse
    continuing her journey curled up in chaos
    each trail a fragment of forgotten memories

    Delusions are alive in her

    A perfect flaw of raven fields
    razed with withered crops

    The dream is curved around her tail
    liquid and edged with bone roses

    She peels from herself

    Iridescent
    Venomous
    Bleeding

    Watercolors evaporating from forked tongue
    Canvassed

    Painted to slither off the cliff
    landing beside her arrow fangs
    her brand new scales
    melting

    Like sugar inside my peppermint tea
    ~




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