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    dots Submission Name: Achingly, shakingly,dots
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    Author: AsiaticFox
    ASL Info:    28/M/A butterfly's dream
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 254/389/301
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Description:
       Been reading too much e. e. cummings, I suspect.


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    dotsAchingly, shakingly,dots
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    Achingly, shakingly,
    prodding at the entrance of
    Hello and Oh God and moan

    so this is the game as old as we;
    the prize is more players, posterity.
    i'll take you by the railing
    - no, that's not the wood groaning,
    that's me.




    Submitted on 2015-03-26 14:18:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      ...huh, not every day I find myself reading a reference like this on ES. Usually, the members of this site stray from publishing any sexually-based themes at all, if not a prose or a chapter from an upcoming book, pff. I, myself, have written a couple ballsy attempts at appreciating the art of sex through writing, so it's nice to know that not everyone finds it to be taboo to write about. Also, I, too, have been brushing up on my ecummings reads! I can see where you're coming from, though you do have an entirely unique way of wording things.
    Short, sweet, right to the point...almost as if a prologue to the bigger idea. Continue, please.
    Ah, my only critique would be that I do have a pet peeve with the incorrect usage of the tilde (~), so I must stop myself there.
    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2015-04-15 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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