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Last Kiss

Author: faideddarkness
ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
Elite Ratio:    6.5 - 102 /56 /52
Words: 77
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Last Kiss

Though from his lips a gift of his heart,
Through his eyes poured his life and depart.
Brittle bones into sand possessed by time,
Her heart weeps, death's forsaken crime.
From life's existence till now never more,
But into memory, into legend, forever adore.
Now he, a ghost upon her conscious, she grows to miss.
But what death has taken she has stolen back, first true love's kiss.

Submitted on 2015-03-26 17:41:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i really liked this piece great write thanks for sharing

| Posted on 2015-04-02 00:00:00 | by Timmy S. Edgar | [ Reply to This ]

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