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    dots Submission Name: I've Seen Herdots
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    Author: SavedDragon
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 303/258/84
    Words: 261
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    I watched her

    As she glided across the room

    As if she had wings

    Her voice was music to my ears

    As if she could sing

    But she never spoke to me




    I noticed when she was sad

    But when she smiled and laughed

    She was graceful

    A quality I wished I had

    But she never saw me




    She had good hair days and bad hair days

    Switched her style to her mood

    And It was just a phase

    I smiled at her from the distance

    But she never noticed me




    I wished I could have been there

    When she looked stressed

    She sighed a few times, looked down

    But my life was a mess

    She kept calm and carried on




    Her intelligence could not be matched

    I saw her kiss her boyfriend on the cheek

    She seemed needy and attached

    But she was better than me




    The earth stood still when she passed by

    But that was just a memory

    I wanted her, the good and bad

    But she never spoke to me




    I remember the vividness of her beauty

    Days go by when sometimes I think of her

    She hasn't seen me

    But I've seen her




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      I feel this would have been more of an impact had it been shorter.
    I do not particularly appreciate the repetition of only one phrase, that being "But she never spoke to me", as it sorta threw me off.
    I just wish it had gotten to the point, rather than the ramble, as it had been so straight-forward in the beginning, though much less so towards the end.
    However, I enjoyed reading it and its purpose is not at all difficult to relate to.
    | Posted on 2015-03-28 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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