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there is a blue


Author: AsiaticFox
ASL Info:    28/M/A butterfly's dream
Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 254 /389 /301
Words: 45
Class/Type: Poetry /Nature
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there is a blue



there is sun
warmth now too

shriveled (skeletal trees
come back to l(if)e
) buds appear

there is a blue
above me and you




Submitted on 2015-03-29 13:21:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Is it me or does the piece depict the arrival of spring?
...It's probably just me.
I'm, admittedly, a seasonal poetry fanatic - as I mentioned in a comment I made recently, so I often misconstrue messages with literal weather, although I'm well aware that there be metaphor front of it all.
A beautiful, cut-to-the-chase write with, what feels to me, the potential to be the sum of something grander.
Very well done.
| Posted on 2015-04-04 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
  This kind of reminded me of the movie 'Perfect Sense'
where the population inexplicably loses their sense of smell and taste and hearing and then sight one by one- in doing so they compensate and appreciate what they have

until it's gone,

so i liked that this struck the other tone.

The formatting with the if and the spacing was really excellent

and just that little

if


it did so much.

Good for you.
| Posted on 2015-03-29 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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