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    dots Submission Name: there is a bluedots

    Author: AsiaticFox
    ASL Info:    28/M/A butterfly's dream
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 254/389/301
    Words: 45
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotsthere is a bluedots

    there is sun
    warmth now too

    shriveled (skeletal trees
    come back to l(if)e
    ) buds appear

    there is a blue
    above me and you

    Submitted on 2015-03-29 13:21:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Is it me or does the piece depict the arrival of spring?
    ...It's probably just me.
    I'm, admittedly, a seasonal poetry fanatic - as I mentioned in a comment I made recently, so I often misconstrue messages with literal weather, although I'm well aware that there be metaphor front of it all.
    A beautiful, cut-to-the-chase write with, what feels to me, the potential to be the sum of something grander.
    Very well done.
    | Posted on 2015-04-04 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
      This kind of reminded me of the movie 'Perfect Sense'
    where the population inexplicably loses their sense of smell and taste and hearing and then sight one by one- in doing so they compensate and appreciate what they have

    until it's gone,

    so i liked that this struck the other tone.

    The formatting with the if and the spacing was really excellent

    and just that little


    it did so much.

    Good for you.
    | Posted on 2015-03-29 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]

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