Is it me or does the piece depict the arrival of spring?
...It's probably just me.
I'm, admittedly, a seasonal poetry fanatic - as I mentioned in a comment I made recently, so I often misconstrue messages with literal weather, although I'm well aware that there be metaphor front of it all.
A beautiful, cut-to-the-chase write with, what feels to me, the potential to be the sum of something grander.
Very well done.
This kind of reminded me of the movie 'Perfect Sense'
where the population inexplicably loses their sense of smell and taste and hearing and then sight one by one- in doing so they compensate and appreciate what they have
until it's gone,
so i liked that this struck the other tone.
The formatting with the if and the spacing was really excellent