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    dots Submission Name: is there a pointdots

    Author: AsiaticFox
    ASL Info:    28/M/A butterfly's dream
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 254/389/301
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsis there a pointdots

    there a
    point to all
    of this verbiage

    there a
    point to all
    of the birds singing

    Submitted on 2015-03-29 13:26:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think what the birds have is an accord or autonomy
    (which we don't)

    you could say that the schools of fish swimming around in synchronicity is singing.

    you could say Ellie Goulding singing unplugged and accompanied by a couple of few musicians
    is every bit as good as that

    so for me the poem's a bit black and white
    when life's not really like that,

    If an asteroid
    comes hurtling toward the earth
    somewhere in the future

    we (humans) will have an
    opportunity to do something about that

    and you know- things like the deforestation of the world, global warming, over fishing of the oceans etc,

    nukes and our decision/s
    not to use them,

    we are a complex bunch and we (can) do something about that.

    Birds are a sweetness
    but it's easy having that little brain

    so i feel like this (poem) was a point made but not earned.

    | Posted on 2015-03-29 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      I concur. There is something about birds and how their songs touch my heart in the deepest sense. Seriously. My days, at least the best of them, start as the sun starts to rise and that one lone song greets it. To be joined by all the others.

    Spring is here methinks!
    | Posted on 2015-03-29 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]

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