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    dots Submission Name: Better than this?dots
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    Author: nicodemous
    ASL Info:    7-5-82/M/Hell
    Elite Ratio:    5.58 - 283/221/121
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsBetter than this?dots
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    I don't want to be what I am

    But what else could I be



    A monument to failure

    Is what life is to me



    A long sting of mistakes

    And missed opportunities



    Ungrateful for what I got

    Though I don't mean to be



    Shut it all

    Shut it all

    Shut it all out



    And patiently await the end

    For then comes absolution



    And a peace no one can offer

    Given only by oblivion




    Submitted on 2015-04-01 10:13:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I tell my four year old step daughter all the time patience is deciding to be happy while you wait, I tell her this to remind myself. I like how despite the way you are feeling throughout thid piece you choose to be patient.
    | Posted on 2015-05-02 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      I was gonna include a couple excerpts from the piece in order to offer emphasis on my personal points of pressure, but as it turns out, I can't find the keys.
    The entire piece is relative - from top to bottom.
    What I'd like to point out is its simplicity, especially; facilitating the readers' empathy.

    Anyone could get this, and that's what a writer needs in order to gain recognition.
    Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2015-04-04 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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