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    dots Submission Name: Observing Lovedots

    Author: jaycee
    ASL Info:    44/F/ Texas
    Elite Ratio:    5.27 - 2626/1259/187
    Words: 465
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsObserving Lovedots

    Though impartial, I can never be as
    I try to see you through others eyes.
    Today you will be just a man—
    Past his youth, not yet elderly,
    Though you show signs of aging.
    Your dark hair, now sports silver,
    Or perhaps that’s just the beard.
    You remain tall, could never be otherwise
    When you stand over six foot two.
    The spring in your step has shifted;
    Now the measured step of one who knows
    His direction and has felt the weight of responsibility.
    The complacency of years has added a pound or two,
    And the sun, or was it worry, left a few lines around your brown eyes.
    Despite it all, women still find you attractive--
    Evidenced by their eyes tracking you, then jumping
    To me with puzzled curiosity.

    Covetous gazes are just there--
    An impartial reminder that for better or worse, you chose me,
    And all detachment ends.
    My eyes may see you as just another man,
    My heart never could.
    It sees every flaw and imperfections, and each
    Carries its own endearment because it
    Creates you in your entirety of emotions, habits, and form.
    Your chest is the one I have laid my head upon for warmth,
    To cuddle against, or to soak up tears of sorrow and grief.
    Your scarred hands are the ones that hold mine just because,
    Stroke through my hair, and caress my body in more ways
    Than I could ever describe.
    Your mouth still kisses me good morning
    and says, “I love you,” in front of the guys.
    Your whiskey brown eyes, see all, or do they?
    Sometimes, I know they must be blind as they look past
    All of my foibles and blemishes to see only desirability and beauty.
    That is your magic which annihilates objectivity, for whom
    Could ever be dispassionate through the eyes of love?
    I am compelled by your love, until I am
    Nothing more than your reflecting pool, a deep
    Morass of feeling, ignoring all others.
    There may be thousands more handsome, smarter,
    Better able to provide, but for me, there is only you:
    My rock; my safety blanket; my magic mirror; my partner;
    My Love

    So once again I have failed.
    My thoughts have morphed from unbiased to subjective,
    But it’s a failure that I’ll gladly own.
    Perhaps it means I love you, at least half as well
    As you love me—the bar is incredibly high.
    My eyes see never just a man, but my man—
    The one who loves me when I cannot;
    The one who loves me through trials, change and joys;
    The one who makes me better than I thought I could be;
    The one who owns my heart and takes objectivity.
    Know that, while observational neutrality vanished,
    My love never could.

    Submitted on 2015-04-01 11:09:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is so beautiful. It is a rare thing in this day and age to find a love that lasts, and you have. Not only that, but he inspires this outpouring of warmth and words, and you have captured perfectly what love feels like when it has matured and grown together. I think this is perfect in every way :)
    | Posted on 2016-05-09 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      This is gorgeous Jaycee, every word and intimacy spoken captivated me and my heart fluttered as I am sure yours does. This incredible description if love and bonds reminds me of my own affectionate relationship. Thank you for posting. I am highly satisfied by this piece and want to share it with others.
    | Posted on 2016-01-09 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so universal, so relatable, I felt each passing line as a picture of my own thoughts.

    That's what love does, it never blinds you to the other's faults, it makes you appreciate each one as integral to the structure of your partner.

    Thanks for letting us observe for a minute.

    | Posted on 2015-04-12 00:00:00 | by Carosuel | [ Reply to This ]
      Dear me, were I to hear such words. I had not felt passion like this in such a very long time. When people ask me, I tell them exist to serve my ambition. Perhaps had I met with words like yours in my youth, it may have changed my life. I now tip my hat to your good fellow.
    | Posted on 2015-04-06 00:00:00 | by Silver20G | [ Reply to This ]

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