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    dots Submission Name: The Mind of Child Indigo~dots
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    Author: ShadowParadox
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 23/66/34
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Mind of Child Indigo~dots
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    "What do you want to be
    when you grow up
    my dearest Indigo?"

    Indigo looked up at Mother Ivy
    With eyes of emerald
    the size of mini globes

    She closed her eyes a moment
    Thinking
    Brushing away the curly tendrils of
    hair from her creased brows

    Mother Ivy bent
    whispering butterflies
    into the child's ear

    "Don't be afraid my doll
    Speak
    Never hold your peace"

    As Indigo open her eyes
    Her thick lashes
    Made a breeze
    Which swept the worries
    From Mother Ivy

    "When I grow up
    I want to be poetry"

    Mother Ivy gathered her close
    kissing the lovely child with sweet dreams
    While poppies bled scents into their clothes

    "Why do you say that my dear?"

    Indigo twirled in her mothers arms
    Her eyes flashed with golden specks
    As the sun smiled light into her soul

    "Because poetry is sign-language
    that speaks to the deaf heart"




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      Haha! It seems fitting that, unlike me, my shadow writes poetry with kindness and not madness like I do. :) Didn't expect much from the title as indigo children is a concept I despise but the cuteness and simplicity of this poem won me over...
    | Posted on 2016-10-19 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      my only suggestion here would be possibly change "never hold your peace" to '….hold your piece'. It's the more common usage, although perhaps you meant to make said statement.
    | Posted on 2015-04-15 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      Indigo strikes me as a child quaint and marveling. If I am ever to bear children, because of this poem, I've got a hunch that Indigo may be on the list of Name Considerations-
    That is, if it isn't already.
    | Posted on 2015-04-04 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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