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    dots Submission Name: Machiavelliandots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 288/229/264
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       Just trying something new. Sorry if you don't know Spanish, haha.


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    dotsMachiavelliandots
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    This paint peels; shriveled, crisp with filth compuesto por emisiones tóxicas
    Disparando el prejuicio como balas al aire, nonetheless ruinous in my latency

    The sweeping hue and sleeping vibrancy cumple paredes descoloradas
    Me parecen la infancia that inevitably passed me by

    Rather than the jaunty frolic of a child at play, las piernas mías trajinaban como tronco tumbado en el campo;
    la colilla en carie tanto como my pair of impacted canines when I was 13

    They did not fix, you see; siguen arrastrando las palabras mías intentadas
    En vez, se encajan and not a brush of the tongue may be uttered.

    At fault am I for being rendered speechless?
    The words I lack made up for, are they?
    For many lives to come, I feel to be perceived as blase.

    Sino yo, correspondiendo a los defectos ocultos de mi alma,
    Soy un solo llanto a cada día y el silencio constante por la noche.




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