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    dots Submission Name: Caveat to the Illusionsdots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 75/182/213
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 1057
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       Felt inspired to write something and this was it. Enjoy and don't forget to check out some of my other work!


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    dotsCaveat to the Illusionsdots
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    Caveat to the illusions,
    in hope they remember their place-
    Spoken in civil delusions,
    in hope of a saving grace-

    Shield used as sword,
    when liberty was just a word-
    A choice made; our own accord,
    thunderous- conformity whirred.

    Little time left for change-
    ambitions slowly begin to rust-
    Minds already begin to derange,
    socially we crumble to dust-

    Lacking a true hero or heroine,
    a cause to mantle that defines us--
    Wandering darkness therein,
    searching endlessly for terminus-




    Submitted on 2015-04-06 15:47:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I learned a new word today! That, I will leave to you to guess, hah.
    At first glance, I couldn't tell its precise purpose, but once I reached the third verse- towards the end- I came to the realization that this piece is indeed 'dark' in a serious retrospective. I haven't read an analysis such as this for...quite a bit.
    Frankly, I find myself a tad perplexed- It's reading one's own thoughts through another person's brilliant wording.
    I do fancy this poem.
    | Posted on 2015-04-14 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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