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    dots Submission Name: The puppy and the riverdots
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    Author: hyproglo
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 180/258/153
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe puppy and the riverdots
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    She would stare intensely
    At the ripples of the eddy
    On the bank of the river

    She'd walk in, ankle deep
    And stare

    She sniffed it out

    When the ripples tickled her nose
    She was convinced
    It was a plaything

    She pawed at her new toy

    The backsplash
    Was her new friends way of saying
    "I like you."

    It made her jump
    Which made the river tickle her nose even more
    And in her own language
    She returned the love

    And they played and they played and they played
    The puppy and the river.





    Submitted on 2015-04-09 01:19:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Adorable. Very different subject for this website which is positively refreshing. You told this interaction perfectly. Not once did I stumble as I read it but was more so captivated as I read from one line to the next. So precious, so sweet. Thank you for sharing.
    | Posted on 2015-04-28 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Gah, this piece is radically endearing for a dog-lover such as I. The image of my own canine companion pawing at a sweeping river is a darling thought, and I do wish this would become a series of drabbles, if not a storybook in totality.
    I could already imagine the hit it would be for young children...consider this.
    | Posted on 2015-04-14 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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