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    dots Submission Name: On the same Turn..dots
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    Author: Forgiven
    ASL Info:    38/F/Florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 337/331/94
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsOn the same Turn..dots
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    And in a moment it could be
    Broken

    Left to its pieces
    scattered in the thick of its madness.

    And there I was.
    Opening the door,
    removing nails that had been freshly placed...

    Have I forgotten me?
    What a wreck is it
    to live by this heart,..

    I wish for truth,
    goodness,
    a life without lies and games....

    I have not found it.

    Possible its just a fairy tale,
    as every other..

    I fell down again,
    I don't feel like getting up...

    but there's that voice

    the reason...

    Im back




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      I'm glad you're back, but wish it wasn't for picking up pieces. And even in marriage there seems at times these endless games of manipulation..and I consider myself as having a solid marriage. But none is perfect. The gems Kelly was referring to still have flaws and inclusions.
    "Have I forgotten me? " I hope not. I hope that you were so busy looking outward you didn't peep in. That's an okay thing, but will all need to look inward too to make sure we're fulfilling our own needs , not just everyone else's. I'm glad you're back on site, even if it's just to pour out pain and heartbreak. You have been missed.
    ~Jan
    | Posted on 2015-04-12 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      A few years ago, a friend of mine asked me to describe "dating". Honestly, how does a person describe happiness, sadness, and self-induced torture (at times)? All of this in search of that one, special person. A needle in a haystack would be easier...so that analogy just didn't seem to work. So, I described dating as searching for a gem on a beach full of pebbles. You have to turn over a lot of pebbles to find the gem...because a gem in the rough looks like every other pebble. You have to pick it up...rinse it off a bit...and give it a good look before you can see whether or not it's a gem. You also have to know a gem when you "see" one (and not just seing with your eyes)...which is the real trick. However, while you're looking over that pebble trying to determine if it's something more...someone else is doing the same thing to you. It's a two way street, as they say. In the end, all of the heart ache will be turned (over) into happiness...just give it time.

    I enjoyed reading "On the same Turn", and I truly hope your voice tells you to keep looking. Don't give up...you'll find your gem, and I'm sure that lucky guy will find a gem in you...

    Kelly
    | Posted on 2015-04-10 00:00:00 | by krs3332003 | [ Reply to This ]


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