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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots

    Author: highthoughtM
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    " Is it love? "

    Breaking doors of loneliness
    Crushing walls of sadness
    Crossing roads of bitterness
    Until I reach to imagine your face s sweetness

    With no snide remarks
    Nor with false friends in front,,
    with your thought at head
    i rest
    settled and calm

    The inner strengths begins to come
    As I find missing Me , the one
    who might have been lost
    If you hadn t been once around

    Submitted on 2015-04-11 07:58:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is different, which I like. You have a common subject in your own words which makes for an interesting read, which is all I ask for. I like to be kept in a piece and the tone and structure and relatable subject did that for me. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2015-04-28 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Sure, could've settled for another word rather than "crushing", but it goes, it goes.
    I can't help but to question- did you intend on that first two-lined verse to be the piece's title? If so, then why not place it at the head?
    I see that this is the only piece of your work that you've posted on this account- if not here, entirely. May I ask how you arrived? What attracted you? Why this particular piece to be your first published publicly? Really, you have a way with words; I'm curious to see more of your work.
    | Posted on 2015-04-15 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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