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    dots Submission Name: Wilted Sunsetsdots
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    Author: ShadowParadox
    Elite Ratio:    2.74 - 25/67/35
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWilted Sunsetsdots
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    "A Healing Hope"
    ~
    My eyes opened to a new day
    No more voices bleeding from the inside
    My breath is folded in an index
    Pearl rib cages expand
    As I exhale and inhale

    The brocade sky
    is a jewel of wonderment today

    I feel in my heart a glimmer of hope

    As honeycomb flowers blossom
    Swaying in the warm breeze

    The sickness has spilled into my veins
    Once more...
    But I won't lose hope
    For somewhere within my depth
    There is strength

    Shadows dipped in ink
    pour into the four corners of my room
    I'm buried in silence
    As the evening is veiled in fiery colors

    A wilted sunset is smudged
    On the horizon of my mind
    Pressing dreams onto my amber pupils

    The sun blazes into a daze
    Melting itself into the starlit sky
    Setting into the galaxy glass
    Morphing into a sunshine rose

    There is always a setting
    to the rising sun
    I wish the same for my health




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    ||| Comments |||
      I know you are creating a book so a nit pick. "pours into the four corners of my room" should be "pour into …..
    Either that or change "Shadows" to 'A shadow'

    Bruce

    PS: You do this kind of thing a lot. If you want tell me and I'll go through your other writes you've shared here and make suggestions for correction. Your publisher will probably insist on such changes.
    | Posted on 2015-04-14 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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