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    Author: closetpoet
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 51/106/70
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    3.99

    It’s why I came here.

    a meatloaf and mashed potatoes;

    green beans, dripping butter.

    More than you expect.



    Amid lavished plaster and vinyl Mediterranean décor

    Muraled Thermopylae shores calling

    Reminding us of distant locations,

    For which there’s no reference.



    Warmed ceramic presentation of home;

    all it should be.

    The thick, meaty aroma,

    inviting .



    comforting as a kiss on the head,

    that says “good boy”

    and “mommy loves you”.

    I wonder if she ever made meatloaf?




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      Meatloaf is definitely a fave at my house but it also seems to be a dish associated with home or at least "home cooking". You did a wonderful job painting the cafe/diner until I was ready to meet the owner who knows most of his patrons by name. The ending says quite a bit about the protagonist in the one line about mom. He is looking for that feeling of mom and home that he's never had or can't recall. Overzll well developed. I'm glad I read it.
    | Posted on 2015-04-19 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]


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