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    dots Submission Name: like hair in the winddots
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    Author: CrypticBard
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 368/381/224
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotslike hair in the winddots
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    Brown in the sun
    of the midday born
    Silken strands
    of crested corn

    sparks light the sky
    brilliant welder's flash
    jewel in disguise
    jouster's winning prize.

    Jack was nimble
    he was quick
    but he's not taking
    that candlestick.

    All the queen's horses
    and all the queen's men
    run their own courses
    then run them again.




    Submitted on 2015-04-16 07:07:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Okay, while this one is fun to read, the words flow and the nursery rhymes give it an upbeat tempo, I have no idea what this is about...and surely you wouldn't put anything that is veiled smut up here to post which is the only place my brain is taking me with this...LOL A description would have been good for this one.
    | Posted on 2015-04-16 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]


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