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    dots Submission Name: A Brief Momentdots

    Author: hyproglo
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 180/257/152
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsA Brief Momentdots

    What be a planets infatuation with a sun?
    Pulls as hard as it can while eloquently keeping things at bay

    A sun must have coined the phrase "Love having you around."

    Never heard a planet say "Let me go."

    As if...as if...there was somewhere...


    No matter how free a celestial appears to be, it is still bound by gravity

    Somewhere else...a human desire
    If only the body would spin around the mind
    Instead of the mind spinning within the body

    "I never thought a mayo and banana sandwich was sexy...until I saw you enjoy one."

    It is easy to think a smile is an act and a compliment is unwarranted

    It is hard to believe that
    a frown is a brief moment of self reflection

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      Definitely a favorite. Sounds as if the sun is convincing the moon of its gravity.
    | Posted on 2015-07-08 00:00:00 | by Chelebel | [ Reply to This ]
      don't knock the m&b thing until you try it, but I will go with peanut butter instead if handy. This was at the same time entertaining and thought provoking. Plus, I liked the change of gears into the second half.

    Gravity... no one understands it, only perhaps part of what it observably does to mass (us). It binds us and guides us (kind of like the "force"?).

    If our spirit flies free of our mass, time and distance become moot. But then one has to accept there is such a thing, that we are something more than the obvious meat having electrical impulse driven autonomic responses with "brief moments" of seemingly cognizant irrationality. Perhaps the mind spins around the body?

    Thanks for the kick start.

    | Posted on 2015-04-18 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      The first line feels grammatically unsound.

    The lines in the very middle are eloquent and beautiful and weighted.

    Mayonnaise and banana? Is that really a thing? My tummy turned.

    The last lines were nicely done.

    All-in-all, very good.

    | Posted on 2015-04-17 00:00:00 | by Carosuel | [ Reply to This ]

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