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Band-aid


Author: BlazeFlamme
ASL Info:    22/m/TX
Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 23 /161 /138
Words: 12
Class/Type: Haiku /Misc
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Band-aid



My dirty band-aid
Relieved the pain for some time
She left infection




Submitted on 2015-04-17 20:18:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  an ointment released
putrific melanomas
from sheathed intentions
| Posted on 2015-04-19 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
  Now you've done it... I have the haiku urge! Just when you think you've gotten over it... wham! But where's the "nature" image here?
| Posted on 2015-04-18 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
  Well, yuck. Next time, use neosporin.

Kidding. Very curt and to the point, I loved the parallel.

-Carrie.
| Posted on 2015-04-17 00:00:00 | by Carosuel | [ Reply to This ]


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