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Devotion


Author: Carosuel
ASL Info:    26/F/Twirlwind
Elite Ratio:    4.93 - 96 /73 /28
Words: 75
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Some of the imagery may be cliché, but it is sentimental to us. The Winter being my bouts of depression and Fire being, quite literally, his personality as a Fire sign. Just a bit of insight into the meaning as I wrote it.


Devotion



In the inbetween of winter and spring,
you held my hand again, so to you I cling,
as the flowers bloomed so brilliant and bright,
and passions of youth fluttered and took flight.

Though we grow old, in time's unbending hold,
and flying has cost us wings, but behold,
my soul sings of your fire's warmth and light,
and how it sheltered me through Winter's night.




Submitted on 2015-04-18 06:33:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a really nice classical poem. Short and sweet. I enjoyed it.
| Posted on 2016-10-21 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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