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    dots Submission Name: Lost and Found pt1dots
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    Author: kase
    ASL Info:    27, Winnipeg
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 169/398/234
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 799
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 545



    Description:
       Old post from my phone. Pt 2 was posted first but only because after looking through the hundreds of note entries on my phone I stumbled onto this one and realized it was pt 1


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    dotsLost and Found pt1dots
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    Save me from my tears
    Because in them I will drown
    Just reach out your hand
    Before you let me down

    I feel so far away
    Slowly we drift apart
    Why do I still fight
    When im no longer in your heart

    I thought that you'd come find me
    Before I became lost
    Id do anything to save you
    No matter what the cost

    I see myself inside you
    I see myself begin to fade
    Life's no longer worth living
    If I have to live this way




    Submitted on 2015-04-19 03:46:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      ...Okay, now I'm not so sure if I had read this before part 2.
    Point is, I like it.
    Though, I do wish you had placed the apostrophe at "I'd"; would've been greatly appreciated.
    | Posted on 2015-05-15 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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