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    dots Submission Name: The Clock Burnsdots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Clock Burnsdots
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    The clock burns oil down the wick of a lantern
    ignites the candle to the stick like waxpaper
    plays on my demons, I couldn't be saner
    winds down like the way I spend paper
    If my budget was a belt I would taper
    I'd have to let out my suit at the tailor
    Dicaprio on the cruise like a sailor
    Die overboard while there's room on the boat
    Go down with the ship as a favor




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      This has an odd flow to feel so constricted. The word choice and evolving subject contradict the ease of just reading so that I had to go back and reread a few times. So in the end it seems like the feeling of the piece does match how one would suppose the writer portrays the thoughts. I liked it, liked having something that I couldn't just read and forget, it made me think, arroused a reaction, kept me interested, which is to me what makes anything worth reading.


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