[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: Amalgamdots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 565
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 475

       I have no idea what this is. It just popped out.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    Your talk was like an amalgam
    of the works of Kafka and Burroughs.
    You injected my brain
    with lurid, bizarre stories
    about being covered in snakes, crickets, and flies
    bathed in vomit and sweat
    and one about a Mexican whore high on peyote
    who persecuted you
    like a Roman tormenting a Christian,
    but you couldn't bring yourself to cry,
    so you submitted to the torture
    like a flaggelant saint.

    Submitted on 2004-08-05 17:34:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      ahhh...i love this im not even sure why though...it was interesting...though i have no clue what its about ...lol..im liking the eighth line...sort of reminds me of that guy in town everyone thinks is nuts telling stories...smiles ange
    | Posted on 2004-08-06 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the way this reads. you do a good job with the tone and imagery. only change i would make would be to change 'Of the works of Kafka and Burroughs' to just 'Of Kafka and Burroughs.'

    your choice, feel free to tkae or leave the suggestion. :-)
    | Posted on 2004-08-06 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      yes, it's bizarre but it sounds like an interesting conversation.
    just kidding. your images are very vivid and this person must have a lot to tell. but still you have to tell me what peyote is. I can imagine that it is some sort of drug but I have no idea what it is exactly. anyway great poem.
    | Posted on 2004-08-06 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow... where the heck did that come from?! must be the shock of stepping back into the humidity of the east coast. it's so bizarre that i like it! it is unique and rather fascinating, in a lurid sort of way! oh, and regarding your journal entry, anyone who is giving you a rough time about your work can just feck off! jealousy, i say!
    | Posted on 2004-08-05 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      very intresting i know that there has to be apoint somewhere i just didnt get it. im knda slow tonight oh well. take care
    | Posted on 2004-08-05 00:00:00 | by majorrisingstar | [ Reply to This ]
      other than the understatement of the word "mistreating" I enjoyed this piece.
    I don't know what to make of it, but that's not always important to me
    | Posted on 2004-08-05 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, and I don't think anyone else has any idea what it is either! Was pretty fun to read though, and if my brain wasn't a smoldering pile of ash inside my skull right now I'd probably have even more fun trying to figure it out.
    | Posted on 2004-08-05 00:00:00 | by Ontlogicalamity | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    A Sense Of Things written by Daniel Barlow
    Keep written by TheStillSilence
    Honeymoon written by TheStillSilence
    Beauty Rest written by jackz
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    The Human Harmonic written by Daniel Barlow
    Delicious Stews written by elephantasia
    Twin Intercept written by Daniel Barlow
    Untitled written by Daniel Barlow
    Live In Between written by teika5
    Whispered written by endlessgame23
    going,,,"Skin." written by teika5
    untitled written by Outlaw
    Ciggarettes written by Poetic_tragedy6
    Johnny's Cock written by endlessgame23
    To the Artist written by HisNameIsNoMore
    None the Wiser written by endlessgame23
    Not the Devil, but the Wind written by endlessgame23
    FamiliarDemons ©™ written by kyserin
    (Untitled Song) written by TeslaKoyal
    The Want written by Daniel Barlow
    Relentless. The Visceral Fracture. written by Daniel Barlow
    Things They (Don't) Say written by TheStillSilence
    Day 5 written by TheStillSilence
    Deep written by Janesaddiction
    Night- time written by Daniel Barlow
    Rooted in Nature written by Chelebel
    Dream written by closetpoet
    Mystery Read written by kyserin
    Loop-di-Loop written by endlessgame23




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]