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    dots Submission Name: Amalgamdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 565
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       I have no idea what this is. It just popped out.


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    dotsAmalgamdots
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    Your talk was like an amalgam
    of the works of Kafka and Burroughs.
    You injected my brain
    with lurid, bizarre stories
    about being covered in snakes, crickets, and flies
    bathed in vomit and sweat
    and one about a Mexican whore high on peyote
    who persecuted you
    like a Roman tormenting a Christian,
    but you couldn't bring yourself to cry,
    so you submitted to the torture
    like a flaggelant saint.




    Submitted on 2004-08-05 17:34:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ahhh...i love this im not even sure why though...it was interesting...though i have no clue what its about ...lol..im liking the eighth line...sort of reminds me of that guy in town everyone thinks is nuts telling stories...smiles ange
    | Posted on 2004-08-06 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the way this reads. you do a good job with the tone and imagery. only change i would make would be to change 'Of the works of Kafka and Burroughs' to just 'Of Kafka and Burroughs.'

    your choice, feel free to tkae or leave the suggestion. :-)
    | Posted on 2004-08-06 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      yes, it's bizarre but it sounds like an interesting conversation.
    just kidding. your images are very vivid and this person must have a lot to tell. but still you have to tell me what peyote is. I can imagine that it is some sort of drug but I have no idea what it is exactly. anyway great poem.
    | Posted on 2004-08-06 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow... where the heck did that come from?! must be the shock of stepping back into the humidity of the east coast. it's so bizarre that i like it! it is unique and rather fascinating, in a lurid sort of way! oh, and regarding your journal entry, anyone who is giving you a rough time about your work can just feck off! jealousy, i say!
    | Posted on 2004-08-05 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      very intresting i know that there has to be apoint somewhere i just didnt get it. im knda slow tonight oh well. take care
    | Posted on 2004-08-05 00:00:00 | by majorrisingstar | [ Reply to This ]
      other than the understatement of the word "mistreating" I enjoyed this piece.
    I don't know what to make of it, but that's not always important to me
    | Posted on 2004-08-05 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, and I don't think anyone else has any idea what it is either! Was pretty fun to read though, and if my brain wasn't a smoldering pile of ash inside my skull right now I'd probably have even more fun trying to figure it out.
    | Posted on 2004-08-05 00:00:00 | by Ontlogicalamity | [ Reply to This ]


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