Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Amalgamdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 574
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 475



    Description:
       I have no idea what this is. It just popped out.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsAmalgamdots
    -------------------------------------------


    Your talk was like an amalgam
    of the works of Kafka and Burroughs.
    You injected my brain
    with lurid, bizarre stories
    about being covered in snakes, crickets, and flies
    bathed in vomit and sweat
    and one about a Mexican whore high on peyote
    who persecuted you
    like a Roman tormenting a Christian,
    but you couldn't bring yourself to cry,
    so you submitted to the torture
    like a flaggelant saint.




    Submitted on 2004-08-05 17:34:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      ahhh...i love this im not even sure why though...it was interesting...though i have no clue what its about ...lol..im liking the eighth line...sort of reminds me of that guy in town everyone thinks is nuts telling stories...smiles ange
    | Posted on 2004-08-06 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the way this reads. you do a good job with the tone and imagery. only change i would make would be to change 'Of the works of Kafka and Burroughs' to just 'Of Kafka and Burroughs.'

    your choice, feel free to tkae or leave the suggestion. :-)
    | Posted on 2004-08-06 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      yes, it's bizarre but it sounds like an interesting conversation.
    just kidding. your images are very vivid and this person must have a lot to tell. but still you have to tell me what peyote is. I can imagine that it is some sort of drug but I have no idea what it is exactly. anyway great poem.
    | Posted on 2004-08-06 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow... where the heck did that come from?! must be the shock of stepping back into the humidity of the east coast. it's so bizarre that i like it! it is unique and rather fascinating, in a lurid sort of way! oh, and regarding your journal entry, anyone who is giving you a rough time about your work can just feck off! jealousy, i say!
    | Posted on 2004-08-05 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      very intresting i know that there has to be apoint somewhere i just didnt get it. im knda slow tonight oh well. take care
    | Posted on 2004-08-05 00:00:00 | by majorrisingstar | [ Reply to This ]
      other than the understatement of the word "mistreating" I enjoyed this piece.
    I don't know what to make of it, but that's not always important to me
    | Posted on 2004-08-05 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, and I don't think anyone else has any idea what it is either! Was pretty fun to read though, and if my brain wasn't a smoldering pile of ash inside my skull right now I'd probably have even more fun trying to figure it out.
    | Posted on 2004-08-05 00:00:00 | by Ontlogicalamity | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    20019

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (4) written by endlessgame23
    To the Artist written by HisNameIsNoMore
    phantom limbs written by expiring_touch
    Lilitu written by endlessgame23
    Angel Eyes written by poetotoe
    i've missed written by mysalvation
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (6) written by endlessgame23
    Shi written by ShyOne
    mimicry written by expiring_touch
    Relativity written by poetotoe
    (Untitled Song) written by TeslaKoyal
    Life is moments written by Ramneet
    Love written by saartha
    to Be like written by KeeperOfLight
    Physician, Heal Thyself written by WriteSomething
    Redemption written by poetotoe
    Journey written by endlessgame23
    winners circle written by ShyOne
    The Poems Death written by Mepoduo
    Comme un lion en avril written by Outlaw
    Vortex: The Imagination That Is written by KeeperOfLight
    Florida's Autumn Solstice written by closetpoet
    Etiquette written by saartha
    More then just goodbye written by faideddarkness
    Deep Into A World Of Despair written by DeathTone
    The Unicorn written by BlazeFlamme
    Shut Up written by annie0888
    untitled written by ShyOne
    Dream written by closetpoet
    Carry written by saartha

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry