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    dots Submission Name: chemistrydots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Is this too awkward? It feels so different spitting it out than taking it in.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    The old days have gone away
    There is an echoe that mascerades as a stain
    But I am so much consumed with the images before me
    Alive and awake with this chapter of the story
    Like pages of the beginning have just been ripped away
    Athe paths that brought me here I can't seem to place

    These days are so silent I hear the whispers of my sovereign lord
    And I question how I never heard life through this frequency before
    And I suppose that the world around me has just been so loud I got distracted
    Focused on all the careful things, wondering next what would happen
    Attentive solely to the fate of my concerns
    Unable to see through the mountains to discern

    It is as if the old things have truly passed away
    It is as if the substance of the entire world has changed

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      I'm imagining a somber setting, perhaps high up in a mountain. There's fog all around, and our character (you, I assume) is delving into the past. They're not sure if everything that has happened was for the best, but it was progress. I almost feel as if any sort of progress was a good sign, be it bad or good.

    All we can do is keep waiting, like our dear protagonist here.
    | Posted on 2015-07-04 00:00:00 | by Kael Fenshir | [ Reply to This ]
      So the tone of this is a bit different from your other writes, but not so much that it seems awkward. It really makes for a clear read, well worded if a bit more simplistic than some of your others. Ir really like the first three lines of the second strophe. I think we all get so distracted by the noise we don't hear the message intended for us. I'm happy you are coming to a place of peace in your life.
    | Posted on 2015-04-27 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]

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