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    dots Submission Name: divinitydots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    I am a mile away from the essential conclusions provided by centuries of pilgrims
    They taste the water when they are thirsty as though only provoked by their needs
    And what conclusions can really be drawn
    When motive is the forefront of the journey
    Is observation obsolete?

    I have found myself drunk with sobriety
    Hovering over nature
    A vast river
    Indiscretions forgotten in lue of dawn

    I would not have volunteered for thid path
    Though secretly longed for by chance
    By silent dreams
    I never considered this destination a reality
    And where will I go now that I have gotten here

    What a brave chap I consider myself to have becomr
    Deciding on a version of life that has repeatedly gone awry
    yet this time, I have progressed
    And yet thid time

    In a parallel of every failed attempt at life
    I am embarking on a settlement rooted witj really very
    Very very
    Foundationally strong roots
    And I thank you all
    All of you
    For attending but for a moment
    This successful embarkment
    Of my divine ideal

    Submitted on 2015-04-25 19:41:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    There are some typos through out the write, but those are easily spotted and fixed when you have a minute.
    Journeys, Sometimes we think it's all about the motive and forget the value of observation, only to complete a journey, look back, and wish we had paid more attention.
    Progress--well moving in a forwardly direction in life has its own rewards even if life feels like "Groundhog Day" on loop.
    | Posted on 2015-04-27 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]

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