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    dots Submission Name: Cuddledots

    Author: closetpoet
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 51/106/70
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    I’ve had dreams,
    the exotic stranger
    their features,
    shadowed in greys,
    subtle lines
    an amalgamation of features
    pulled together by
    fervid longings
    for known and unknown

    unrestrained and strikingly intense
    still unable to construct
    who it is that I wait for
    and there you are

    full of color; definition
    of emotion
    adoration; hunger
    personifying desirous needs

    what feeble imagination
    failed to construct
    now tangible to a minds eye
    yearning for tactile gratification
    I can't go back to sleep

    Submitted on 2015-04-28 08:35:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I imagined Sheldon (from the Big Bang Theory) saying that last couple of lines;

    "yearning for tactile gratification
    I can't go back to sleep"

    Haha. I enjoyed this, very much. It describes something so vividly that...I myself couldn't detail so well without sounding rather stingy and nonetheless unappealing. I read this and throughout, it really just sounded like a highly intellectual teenager going through a hormonal phase, but I guess...that's self-association for ya.
    ...I was trying to keep myself from "FAV"ing yet another piece, but I really can't help it. I guess this concludes my 75?
    | Posted on 2015-05-11 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]

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