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    dots Submission Name: Libby and the Hideoutdots
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    Author: RamSlade
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 4/3/3
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsLibby and the Hideoutdots
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    would you just listen to tha stomp
    my nurturing on a wing and a beat
    strike up the band for all its worth
    buncha harmonizing damn fools
    jivin' with Leadbelly and Moody Blues
    givin' it up for Timothy Leary
    oh yes, the guru is dead, yes, yes
    takin' a sip of sweet lucy, dribblin'
    down my chin, or was that sweet
    Libby, high sheriff's daughter, whoops
    that'll droop it to a fair thee well
    Charles and I had a hideout hid
    told Libby she could join providin'
    she gave us a peek at her whatsitlooklike
    Libby smiled, grinned, then hee-hawed
    said that'll cost you a quarter apiece
    I had to run home beg for a quarter
    Charles had one he got to look first




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      One really knows a piece is at its best quality when the voice of the narrator has its own personality - and even its own face! The characters weren't even described, yet I found myself personifying them vividly in my own head. The voices were as clear as though I'd been watching a video, rather than reading a prose. The body and its scaling had me incapable of skipping or dismissing; I was glued to the page. Maybe it's because I've got such an infatuation for the country attitude, but its cultural attributes really stuck it solid.
    Wish I'd read more of these around here. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2015-05-11 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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