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    dots Submission Name: The Man in the Moon Outeddots
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    Author: RamSlade
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 4/3/3
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 708
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    dotsThe Man in the Moon Outeddots
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    the unusual seems to want tender
    beneath a full moon breakable
    a careful cloud scuttles across its anxious
    angels flying hushed tonight
    when the time is compliant they will bring their fragile
    deposit careful kisses upon his clever
    before they leave they take them back blushing
    the moon tames the clouds and shines naughtily
    a tear in the corner of his precious
    man in the moon has removed himself from the closet
    telling the stars curious and cleverly
    that he waits
    for the cow that jumped over the moon




    Submitted on 2015-04-29 16:27:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ...I was so sure that I'd commented on this...
    Anyway, I do know that the other day, when I'd first read this piece, I had shared it on a social network in fervent admiration for its originality.
    I remember especially high-lighting the following lines;

    "angels flying hushed tonight
    when the time is compliant they will bring their fragile
    deposit careful kisses upon his clever
    before they leave they take them back blushing"

    and I'm not quite sure why.
    I'm thinking it has to do with the mention of angels and their kisses, as the image to me just stands out glowing. Point is, this write drew me in and I couldn't get out. I'm still puzzled as to why I hadn't posted my praise before...I really was certain that I had!
    | Posted on 2015-05-11 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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