Growing up "normal"
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Growing up "normal"
growing up... there was always that one problem, that problem of trying to fit in, to be the "cool kid"... to be the kid that had it all, the one on top who could never fall... every day it was something new, a fad that was a race, a race that for kids like me became a chase, a chase to fit in... I have always loved long hair.. but in my desperation, I cut it to try and fit in.. to be.. "cool"... you always had to have style, but instead of style my mother got the dial... the call that said your son is a problem, for in my act of desperation, to seek the fad of fitting in, I lashed out against the other kids! for what was in for me, was just a mockery! Ridiculed by names, names such as loser or poser... all because i wanted to be a part of the crowd, because I just couldn't say it out loud! what I wanted to say.. Is what I say today... Fad is just a claim to media's definition... Definition of acceptable... Of beauty... to be... "normal"... but what is "normal" if not ourselves?! What I call normal isn't normal to you, so why should anything be "normal" to kids? If anything the only thing that truly is "normal"... Is the process of "growing up".... |
Submitted on 2015-04-30 00:43:00 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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| This sounds raw and sloppy and as gloriously off-key as a cry for understanding from the gut (and not the intellect). Refining this write would make as much sense as polishing a chalk drawing for a public viewing. If you choose to tweak any part of this post, I'd suggest that you do so judiciously. A major overhaul would be a mistake but a minor adjustment here or there would be fine. Just my thoughts. | Posted on 2015-05-06 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ] | Your feedback requirement was unspecified so commenting accordingly | "the call that said your son is a problem, for in my act of desperation, to seek the fad of fitting in, I lashed out against the other kids! for what was in for me, was just a mockery! Ridiculed by names, names such as loser or poser..." Those two paras had more interesting lines than the rest of the poem combined. a. I recommend you stop rhyming poems as you will later realize that a poem can good without stringent rhyme constraints. b. If it does not rhyme in itself, don't force it. c. I see how you like to take a walkthrough from the beginning...try leaving pause entries in between e.g. I cut it to try and fit in.. to be.. "cool".. can be rephrased like (not exactly but something like) kill my happiness to be one of them, To fit in, I cut it. To be just like them...the so called cool... Hope you find my points useful | Posted on 2015-05-01 00:00:00 | by keestu | [ Reply to This ] | Indeed what is normal? We are all, each and every one of us anomalies. We are individuals not social contiguities. Young people should find themselves first and not worry so much about high-school madness. Take it from an oldie we outgrow high-school with new horizons in fact. It's not the end all it seems at the time. | Bruce | Posted on 2015-04-30 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ] | |
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