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    dots Submission Name: always in threesdots

    Author: isabella
    Elite Ratio:    5.56 - 803/905/472
    Words: 125
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    dotsalways in threesdots

    where did you learn how to do that?
    (as if it's some kind miracle.)
    (some kind of something he has never had.)

    but he does this to me;
    like spring does this to me
    after a long, hard winter.

    we are tangible. tangled.
    up in breathy, leggy, love. chickadees,
    black-capped and full, sing.

    you continue to surprise me.
    then later, as sleep is near:
    i think i've gone to heaven and back.

    his dimples, they break my heart when he smiles;
    makes me wanna put my hands in his hair. kiss him harder.
    and i do.

    Submitted on 2015-05-05 15:15:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this a lot.

    i. is pretty sexy but also wonderful by way of comparison.

    Something retrieved
    Something comparable
    Something acted on

    Sounds like a good recipe except love isn't like that (a recipe)
    It's spontaneous, a co-mingling of two, and flows
    just the way your poem does.

    You get the sense of a person waking up in the morning and immediately checking to see if that thing is there, love, because love is elusive, and love, because love is of wealth.

    You get the sense of these two finding that it is
    and like conspirators- breaking out in unimaginable smiles.

    As i surmise this is the best kind of poem.
    Good for you.

    | Posted on 2016-03-22 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      I feel like commenting on this, but I'm not one for romance, so I don't particularly fancy it as a whole. However, I would like to point out that this specific stanza was incredibly clever;

    "but he does this to me;
    like spring does this to me
    after a long, hard winter."

    I'll be remembering it for a while, as I relate to it personally.

    A lover of mine and I were once on and off, while I'd unknowingly fallen in love with her when she'd already moved on.
    We restored our friendship recently and I'd gotten hold of the news - not to her, but to me, as new as it all was.
    Still, her presence, to me, was more precious than anything; whether friend, foe, or anything more.

    My loneliness (being without her) was the long, hard winter
    Her return was my spring.
    | Posted on 2015-05-14 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
      (insert a bit o'heart here)
    | Posted on 2015-05-08 00:00:00 | by slingerofink | [ Reply to This ]

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