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    dots Submission Name: Three sky haikudots

    Author: Glen Bowman
    ASL Info:    70 m Oz
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1140/307/186
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       North-eastern New South Wales, Australia ... a highland town planted with European trees ... the native birds have learned to eat their seeds! But the oaks and the willows have Spring at different times. The black sheep-dog is true: it's a Kelpie cross.

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    dotsThree sky haikudots

    Autumn's tall poplars

    launching their leaves on the wind -

    sky blue, white and gold

    A cloud of white wings:

    cockatoos screaming at dusk

    from the cold, clean sky.

    Small clouds, grey and white,

    sheep all over a bare hill,

    black dog - looking up.

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      this was such a pleasurable read. eloquent and to the point as a good (or good three) hiaku should be. you managed to paint a detailed picture with few words. excellent job.
    | Posted on 2015-05-11 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
      there is something about sky and how one can interact with it. i enjoy very much how your trees, birds and black dog do (which is a keeper for sure, that one). you do well here. snapshots; postcards, even. enjoyable they be. (insert smile here.) keeping looking up. it's big and small all at once.
    | Posted on 2015-05-10 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]
      I adore this. As one of the many who used to mis-use the art of haiku, I'm incredibly satisfied that someone finally utilize it in its initial function.
    One of my favorite seasonal pieces, thank you for sharing.
    | Posted on 2015-05-06 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]

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