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    dots Submission Name: Meghkonnadots

    Author: Thenocturnal
    ASL Info:    24 / Male / Darkness
    Elite Ratio:    1.05 - 4/4/4
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 644
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    You must be The Medusa! Looking into your eyes
    I’m sure the onlookers will be turned to stone forever

    No, you must be a warden! Gazing at you
    There's no chance of fleeing, they will be locked in forever

    God must have shown the patience to create your skins and face
    Then he covers the bone with flesh and put an amazing soul in there

    You don’t know how much I love the night,
    Walking alone in the darkness, listening to the Nightingale
    The Last gloomy night I could not find any of them singing
    You must have stolen their sweet voice

    Your lips are just like the petals of red rose and your prongs are shinning pearls,
    They make your smile more attractive in the planet
    And I can just stare your smile all day long, my dear…

    Dear dry leaf please do me a favor,
    Carry this letter to her
    Tell her that she is the most gorgeous girl I’ve ever seen in my life
    And I love her the most…

    Submitted on 2015-05-07 19:45:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Thanks for your precious time and comment dude. You are talking about forgiveness, but there is nothing to forgive bro, I’m really glad you liked it, and also I changed the line as you suggested. Again, thanks for your feelings and it’s appreciated. I wrote it for my imaginary girlfriend, and I gave her a metaphoric name “Meghkonna”. Megh = cloud and Konna = girl. Ha ha…. Have a nice day…
    | Posted on 2015-05-18 00:00:00 | by Thenocturnal | [ Reply to This ]
      My close friend has a thing for Skyrim, so when I read that fourth verse I rushed to introduce the poem to her. She did fancy it, might I say.
    I adore this poem, though I do suggest changing the "stoned forever" to something more elaborate such as "turned to stone" or something along those lines. It might just be me, but I thought of getting high.
    ...Yeah, it's probably just me.
    I don't feel the necessity of critiquing anything further; its simplicity suits the theme, and its overall message. This might just be perfect to dedicate to a lover, or a girl in a boy's English Lit. class - Cough, cough.
    I might be too sweet on some writers, but...please forgive me for seeing practically nothing wrong, at least in terms of grammar, style, rhythm, etc.
    | Posted on 2015-05-11 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]

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