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    dots Submission Name: Love's Embracedots
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    Author: jaycee
    ASL Info:    44/F/ Texas
    Elite Ratio:    5.27 - 2626/1259/187
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsLove's Embracedots
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    Love's Embrace

    Pre-dawn light peeks
    Softly through windows
    Lightening shadows to gray
    Leaving silhouettes as eyes
    Open in drowsy heaviness
    Only to realize you observe
    Every detail in the quiet.

    A long masculine arm raises
    The blanket in silent welcome
    As we begin a well-rehearsed
    choreography of body meeting body.

    Naked breast to chest,
    we lie in love's warm embrace.
    Dark fingers stroke blonde hair
    As feminine fingers trace through
    a mat of soft crispness over chest.
    Occasional kisses rain down--soft; sweet
    As relaxed sighs whisper
    through our intimate cocoon of comfort.

    Deep contentment spreads
    With every swish and beat..
    Tha thump- tha thump- tha thump- tha thump
    Beneath my ear as our hearts match rhythm.

    Two souls intertwined in the joy of being
    Commingled bodies
    At rest
    At peace
    As the pre-dawn light peeks softly
    Through our bedroom window





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      Waking up with your love or lover - it's beautifully stated. I also got a bit of post orgasmic bliss in there :) Lovely!
    | Posted on 2015-05-22 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      Great display. I loved how soft you created the atmosphere. I love those sleepy familiar moments. Intimacy at its peak. You described love making so beautifully capturing the soft feminity and deeply masculine relationship making for such a perfect union of two bodies in tune. Wonderful Jaycee I really enjoyed this.
    | Posted on 2015-05-19 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Quite nice in a better than video scene kind of way. I feel relaxed just having read it. I would not know how to begin to offer any "help" at this point (as mentioned "think feedback"), although my own phrasing and style differs a bit from yours anyway. I could only offer how I might do something like it which would not be an improvement or "better" at all, only of a different mind. Besides, I'm a guy. ;)

    Thanks!

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2015-05-13 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      I was obviously speechless when I left my first comment (speechless in a good way). However, I can't tell a lie: I was having some technical difficulties (but that doesn't mean this bit of poetry isn't worthy of eliciting feelings that words just cannot describe).

    I love how you make the reader feel like they are part of a warm embrace. Your words seem to weave themselves together to make us feel a part of the world you have created. Not in voyeuristic sense...although there is a feeling of "watching" as things unfold.

    The timing of this story and the rising sun are wonderful. What a beautiful way to start a new day!

    When you have time, take a look at a piece that I wrote some time ago called "Sunrise". You might see something similar...

    As always, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your newest work. Thank you for sharing!

    Kelly

    | Posted on 2015-05-10 00:00:00 | by krs3332003 | [ Reply to This ]
      
    | Posted on 2015-05-09 00:00:00 | by krs3332003 | [ Reply to This ]


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