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    dots Submission Name: Once Upon A Time In Mexicodots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsOnce Upon A Time In Mexicodots
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    Once upon a time in Mexico
    Where the sun rises fast
    Yet comes down slow
    Where giants clash
    Yet the kids get to grow.

    I've seen the bitterness in people
    The ones I used to know
    Felt rage that made me cripple
    Because of the way
    Power flows.

    I've seen my brother get dragged
    A few feet from where I stood
    A loyal dog that tore flesh and rags
    To defend the hand that
    Fetched her food.

    I stared at a gun barrel for the first time
    They had destructive power we lacked
    Yet when my brother came back,
    His words still inscribed in my mind
    He said
    "They let me go, because of someone
    I knew from way back."






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