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Author:	Teofila
ASL Info:	17, F, with the wolves
Elite Ratio:	0.4 - 210/104/71
Words:	34

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
Total Views:	1113
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I Say

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Whisper dirty secrets in my ear
Lets pretend there's no one here
make me clutch the sheets
Dont stop until I scream
Love me harder
all the way
and dont stop until I say...

Submitted on 2015-05-13 18:56:44 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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The whispers of dirty secrets in my ear
let me pretend there is no one there
and let me wet these satin sheets
as night sweats are my delusion.

Do not stop, I shall not scream
love is harder to take, is it not
if a pass, a fancy given-some
do not stop, do not love me.

| Posted on 2015-05-25 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
  sad

| Posted on 2015-05-19 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
  Is this supposed to be a time-line?
I supposed so, as I read, because it just randomly skipped from being set in public to being set in private; as I assume the sheets are placed on the bed + located in a bed-room.
Didn't like how short it was, felt like a message meant to be sent through SMS/IMming.
Try a little more vocab and some punctuation.
| Posted on 2015-05-14 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.