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    dots Submission Name: I Saydots
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    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.4 - 210/104/71
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsI Saydots
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    Whisper dirty secrets in my ear
    Lets pretend there's no one here
    make me clutch the sheets
    Dont stop until I scream
    Love me harder
    all the way
    and dont stop until I say...




    Submitted on 2015-05-13 18:56:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    The whispers of dirty secrets in my ear
    let me pretend there is no one there
    and let me wet these satin sheets
    as night sweats are my delusion.

    Do not stop, I shall not scream
    love is harder to take, is it not
    if a pass, a fancy given-some
    do not stop, do not love me.
    | Posted on 2015-05-25 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
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    | Posted on 2015-05-19 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      Is this supposed to be a time-line?
    I supposed so, as I read, because it just randomly skipped from being set in public to being set in private; as I assume the sheets are placed on the bed + located in a bed-room.
    Didn't like how short it was, felt like a message meant to be sent through SMS/IMming.
    Try a little more vocab and some punctuation.
    | Posted on 2015-05-14 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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