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    dots Submission Name: to Baltimoredots

    Author: etheror
    Elite Ratio:    6.32 - 226/272/113
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Edited, still not what it needs to be.

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    dotsto Baltimoredots


    We went on adventures,
    scanned the sky for planets
    and satellites, spent all our money
    on ballgames and bourbon, ran too fast
    too far and fell, drunk on endorphins,
    into the lake after midnight.


    Let's play this game again.
    Come with me to steal
    the neighbors' flowers
    in fat bouquets that smell
    exactly like your
    grandmother's backyard:
    gardenia and hyacinth,
    handfuls overflowing, tied
    together with grapevine.


    Reeking of roses--dirt buried
    in each wrinkle of skin, tip
    of finger to bend of wrist--
    tshirt sticking to my spine
    from the weather, from the
    high noon summer ride
    to your house:
    I stand in your living room
    like it's years ago. Yesterday.
    We remove each other's socks,
    run barefoot into the front yard.
    The neighbors' sprinklers go on
    right about now.

    Submitted on 2015-05-14 19:33:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It's a very pleasant poem. And I suppose there is a time for those as well. It feels real, isn't saccharine or overly sentimental. I suppose in a world obsessed with poetry being amazing and surreal and edgy, it's a bold statement to have something simple that simply is what it is. But then I think of the title and I wonder why Baltimore.
    | Posted on 2015-05-20 00:00:00 | by lukewarm | [ Reply to This ]
      I've been feeling anxious since this morning...
    This read brought me peace once more.
    A passage to a past that never was
    and may never be,
    but has been
    in my mind.
    A velvet goldmine.
    | Posted on 2015-05-15 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]

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