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    dots Submission Name: disassociation dots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 137/244/159
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsdisassociation dots
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    there is heat in my cheeks, and looseness in my bones:
    we are rolling towards summer, rolling stones
    through half-lit alleys, heavily perfumed
    spring rain stains our lips
    and tarmac in its morning haste.

    You have your arm around me, but I am bloodless -
    disassociation made famous
    heart and mind -- while one flutters,
    the other floats.





    Submitted on 2015-05-16 15:10:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      as far as poetry goes... i think this is as good as you can get it.

    i like that it doesn't sit in one spot. and i very much like that some of the boring bits (rolling stones) i long to hate actually end up being my favourites because they lead up to my, for real, truly favourite lines.

    L2 sucks
    L3 is banging
    L's 4 and 5 take my breath away.

    the 2nd strophe:

    as a window to experience, life is not about just one thing.

    so. in reading this, i kind of want to hug you cos it's
    kind of like you are walking down a ramp holding the hand of an alien and i can say (to the world) there, mother fuckers! i told you so.

    Really good writing in Hamburg.
    | Posted on 2015-05-17 00:00:00 | by theludus | [ Reply to This ]


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