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Author: expiring_touch
ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
Elite Ratio:    3.94 - 139 /256 /171
Words: 62
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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there is heat in my cheeks, and looseness in my bones:
we are rolling towards summer, rolling stones
through half-lit alleys, heavily perfumed
spring rain stains our lips
and tarmac in its morning haste.

You have your arm around me, but I am bloodless -
disassociation made famous
heart and mind -- while one flutters,
the other floats.

Submitted on 2015-05-16 15:10:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  as far as poetry goes... i think this is as good as you can get it.

i like that it doesn't sit in one spot. and i very much like that some of the boring bits (rolling stones) i long to hate actually end up being my favourites because they lead up to my, for real, truly favourite lines.

L2 sucks
L3 is banging
L's 4 and 5 take my breath away.

the 2nd strophe:

as a window to experience, life is not about just one thing.

so. in reading this, i kind of want to hug you cos it's
kind of like you are walking down a ramp holding the hand of an alien and i can say (to the world) there, mother fuckers! i told you so.

Really good writing in Hamburg.
| Posted on 2015-05-17 00:00:00 | by theludus | [ Reply to This ]

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