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Going to Bed


Author: expiring_touch
ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 139 /260 /173
Words: 79
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Going to Bed



It starts again, breath tangled in between
the sheets, my hand in yours feels
awkward, and paleness of the skin
along the knuckles is entwined
with metal. My bedroom window
stained by remnants of the apple
tree in bloom. Draw back the curtain -
stare greedily into the night and catch
its icy breath on the edge
of the sill spread out
the air that grew unsteady
in between your palms
and fall.




Submitted on 2015-05-17 16:34:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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