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    dots Submission Name: Going to Beddots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 137/243/158
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsGoing to Beddots
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    It starts again, breath tangled in between
    the sheets, my hand in yours feels
    awkward, and paleness of the skin
    along the knuckles is entwined
    with metal. My bedroom window
    stained by remnants of the apple
    tree in bloom. Draw back the curtain -
    stare greedily into the night and catch
    its icy breath on the edge
    of the sill spread out
    the air that grew unsteady
    in between your palms
    and fall.




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