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    dots Submission Name: Wave Goodbyedots

    Author: Esophagus1
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 231/279/149
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsWave Goodbyedots

    Bleed on me my sun and sky
    and I'll absorb the last of you
    as you wither up and die.

    Let's pray together and say goodbye.

    Minutes burn behind cold eyes
    caught between a second
    and the last of its nine lives.

    Let's sit together and wave goodbye.

    Understand the problem,
    but don't know why
    it's so easy to watch it die.

    Sitting alone and waving goodbye

    Every flower has bloomed.
    The last of all now consumed.
    Betwixt nature and time entombed

    Submitted on 2015-05-17 19:28:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Somethings we cannot recover, it is better just to let them go. And sometimes we can't muster the energy to change things we could change. We just sit in silent ambivalence and watch them pass.
    This is beautifully penned. Jan
    | Posted on 2015-05-21 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      Makes me image an apocalypse in the happening sorta scene;
    where we lose and when we lose the faith burrowed deep into our intangible being. Where spirituality is no longer a source, but the last resort.
    Sad, really. I'd hate to be caught in that position.

    Loving the rhythm, well done.
    | Posted on 2015-05-18 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
      Would one want to assimilate abilities that he perceived to be Godlike? Would he obtain a clearer vision in a realization of the futility of aspiration or would pragmatism and adamant tenacity afford him a better route. Furthermore, of the élan vital in evolutional principle, if this God does not yet exist if he could be said to of become out of……………Why must we say good by when it could be hello and good morning? Time and power are synonymous, a relatively positive dynamic integration, a coordinated interjection through time. In it's the problematic diversity matrix facts, or so my imagination's immaturity would have me believe. To be said ephemeral blossom for you on the manifest destiny of our intrinsic affinity with infiniteness. I guess in it was due yesterday might make corporeally preternatural sense, keep your chin up buckwheat!!

    | Posted on 2015-05-17 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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