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    dots Submission Name: oMirWoPaN Prompts 30, 29, and 27dots

    Author: AsiaticFox
    ASL Info:    28/M/A butterfly's dream
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 254/389/301
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I missed out on NaPoWriMo back in April, and am deciding to do it belatedly, doing the prompts backwards and at my own pace (defeats the purpose of it, possibly, but I am doing it anyway). Funnily enough, the first prompt (#30) is to either write a poem backwards or take an existing one and reverse it, editing it to work (or in my case, editing AND modifying it).

    Prompt 29 - Write a piece as a review

    Prompt 27 (Was not moved by Prompt #28) - Write a poem a hay(na)ku, a three-line piece where the first line has one word, the second, two, and the third, three. Write one or several stringed together.

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    dotsoMirWoPaN Prompts 30, 29, and 27dots



    Birds all singing

    point to IS and AM


    All of this verbiage

    points to WAS and WILL BE



    This sunshine is lovely,
    melts the May snow
    that arrived late afternoon last,
    a freak occurrence.

    This sun:
    one star worth five stars.



    "Here I-"
    "There you are."

    then found.
    "I missed you."

    Submitted on 2015-05-20 11:20:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I learned a couple new things and I suppose that's precisely what made this piece so special.

    Points to you, as well.
    | Posted on 2015-05-25 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
      circling five suns
    adrift on six seas
    i missed where you are
    as i searched where you'd be

    the "who" that I was
    adrift in a dream
    fully unfocused
    eyes wide asleep

    Just some thoughts on yours.
    | Posted on 2015-05-21 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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