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    dots Submission Name: Like a thief in the nightdots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsLike a thief in the nightdots
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    He will come like a thief in the night
    He crept into my heart
    As a thief,
    Come in the darkest of nights.
    He came to take from me
    What I had made mine.
    I writhed in pain
    As He ripped it from
    My clutching, needy hands.
    First this, then that.
    Then one day I stopped clinging
    And too began to help in the clearing.
    "Here take this,” said I, “and that.”
    Placing more and more within His hands.
    I just couldn't give it to Him quick enough!
    Until I had given Him everything,
    Willingly, eagerly.
    And then one day I looked around my emptied house
    and saw I had given Him nothing.
    Nothing of value.
    And in its place,
    Everything.
    Blessed is the thief, who comes in the night.




    Submitted on 2015-05-22 00:22:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Once again, very vivid, and your phrasing and choice of words expressing your theif of the night are very good indeed.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2015-06-28 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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